Woah, massive twist at the end of this teaser. I love the relationship you illustrate between the twins, your MC's frustration is perfectly understandable and that last line packs a punch full of guilt.
Oh wow! I wasn't expecting that!
Nice one! *wasn't expecting it either*
Wow, you totally caught me off-guard. I was all expecting her to end up at the same college! Nicely played!Oh, and Shani was my heart dog's name. *sniff sniff*
And then she died?! Omigosh!Love the voice.
Ugh - punch to the gut there at the end. This has a great flow to it - very natural!
OH MAN! Wow, I'm totally feeling their connection and how she's ready to be apart from her sister, and then bam, her sister is dead. I can imagine there's going to be a lot to deal with emotionally!Good snip!
What the... :XTotally realistic with the way you described twins in the beginning, and then talked about them going their separate ways. Wasn't expecting that ending, though.
Short and most definitely sweet.You teaser has me coming back for more every week.
Ohhhhhhhhhh!! Loved the discription of the twins!
I was enjoying all the typical twin stuff, relating it to stuff I know about twins in real life, and then woah! Where did that come from? I can't decide whether I was more shocked by this teaser or last week's. Probably this one, because it came out of nowhere.
Punch to the gut. Damn. Very powerful, nice misdirection. And it's smooth too.
Wow! The last line was amazing and it had so much power, my eyes nearly popped out of my head!
Wow. This is incredible. I'm already so into this. Incredible.
Ouch - I feel her feelings and what a twist at the end, although I suspected it was coming it still got me. Love the voice!
Wow, what an ending!
Usually when an ending like that comes up, the foreshadowing is too intense, and its not powerful.This was. Great job.
LOVE IT. This is the second teaser in a row where you totally left me hanging! Great job. :)
Great insights, and then sadness. Good set-up, here.
Ooh. Last line like a punch to the gut. Very nice.
Thanks for all your comments guys. I don't know that I'll be posting any more of this particular WIP because to do so would reveal what happened to Sam and I think that I want to keep the mystery burning for now. Next week will be something totally different.Thanks again,Angie
Wow... I'm with pretty much everyone else: shocking twist. I'm looking forward to learning more about your MC and what happened to Shani.
I'm listening to you too Angie :) You have a really strong YA voice, very captivating :)
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